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Light edits to the Emacs Manual (screen.texi)

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Message #8 received at 50926 <at> debbugs.gnu.org (full text, mbox):

From: Drew Adams <drew.adams <at> oracle.com>
To: Stefan Kangas <stefan <at> marxist.se>, "50926 <at> debbugs.gnu.org"
 <50926 <at> debbugs.gnu.org>
Subject: RE: [External] : bug#50926: Light edits to the Emacs Manual
 (screen.texi)
Date: Fri, 1 Oct 2021 01:50:07 +0000

Some quick, minor copy-edit suggestions -

> -  Some commands display informative messages in the echo area to tell
> -you what the command has done,
> +  Some commands display messages in the echo area to tell
> +you what it has done,

Some commands...what they have done.

> , such as Text
> -mode, Lisp mode, C mode, and so forth.  @xref{Major Modes}.  Some
> +mode, Lisp mode, C mode, and so on.  @xref{Major Modes}.

Drop the ", and so *".  It's redundant with "such as".

> +@xref{Optional Mode Line}.  Finally, you can click
> +on different parts of the mode line

Drop "on".

> Hovering
> +the mouse pointer above...shows...by clicking

"Place the mouse pointer on...to show...
by clicking there"

or

"Move the mouse pointer to...to show...
by clicking there"

It's not a hummingbird.  And "above" can
mislead as in toward the top of the screen.

(Informally I use "mouseover" as a verb,
but I'm not suggesting that for Emacs.)

-command from the menu bar.  An arrow on the right edge of a menu item
-means it leads to a subsidiary menu, or @dfn{submenu}.  A @samp{...}
+command from the menu bar or a @dfn{submenu}.  A @samp{...}

That's wrong, IMO.  The menu-bar has menus, which can
have submenus.  The menu-bar doesn't have submenus.

+  If a command in the menu bar have an ordinary key binding

"has", not "have"

-  Instead of using the mouse, you can also invoke the first menu bar
-item by pressing @key{F10} (to run the command @code{menu-bar-open}).
+  You can invoke the first menu bar
+item with your keyboard by pressing @key{F10} (to run the command
@code{menu-bar-open}).

"menu-bar", not "menu bar" if used as an
adjective before the noun.

But what is meant by "the first menu bar item"?
The menu bar doesn't have items.  It has menus.
And what's meant by "first" here?  Must have
something to do with invoking (first command
invoked?), but it's not clear to me what this
is trying to say.

And you can drop "with your keyboard" here:

  with your keyboard by pressing @key{F10}

HTH.  Feel free to ignore, of course.

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